paper on Child Abuse
For this assignment, you will carefully review your essay feedback and make revision choices.
Here are the basic requirements for your essay:
(1) Your essay must be 4-5 pages in MLA format with an additional Works Cited page.
(2) You must use at least 4 sources in this essay, two of which MUST be academic journal articles. The other two may be journal articles or other credible, academic sources.
(3) Your essay must be organized with a formal structure, developed with concrete evidence and analysis, documented in appropriate, ethical MLA style, and written with a formal, clear style.
Please use the following guidelines to help develop a successful essay:
(1) Your essay should begin with an introduction that introduces the topic and ends with a strong thesis. Your thesis should state your argument and its major reasons in a clear, concise manner. Think of it as a mini-map of your paper for a reader.
(2) Then, you should include a background paragraph that offers your reader more information about the topic and its current debate (or relevant history). Make sure your reader is clear about the exigence of the argument; in other words, why does this argument matter NOW?
(3) After, you should include two to four paragraphs that identify your two to four major reasons. Each paragraph should have a clear topic sentence that links back to the thesis, and you should support each body paragraph with sufficient, credible evidence and analysis.
(4) Before you conclude, please add a Refutation of Opposing Arguments, where you will present the opposing side or potential obstacles and offer a refutation in order to convince your reader and eliminate bias.
(5) Finally, compose a conclusion paragraph that ties all of your paper’s points together and argues an overall significance.
(6) Each body paragraph should include concrete evidence from research. You should integrate your research smoothly and ethically. Use identifying tags to introduce your sources and show your reader an outside idea. Always analyze the significance of the research before you move on to the next point! Example: In Jason Ree’s article, he notes that, “QUOTE” (32). This reveals that…
(7) Your tone and style needs to be academic and polished. This helps add credibility to your voice. Reading aloud will help the most with this! Avoid first and second person in this style of writing.
Formatting Requirements
MLA format
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Paper Title:
No. of Pages: 3
Paper Style: MLA Paper Type: Research
Taken English? Yes English as Second Language? No
Feedback Areas: Organization, Topic Development
Paper Goals: This is a rough draft o Child Abuse. Essay must be 4-5 pages in MLA format with
an additional Works Cited page. Essay must be organized with a formal structure,
developed with concrete evidence and analysis, documented in appropriate,
ethical MLA style, and written with a formal, clear style.
Proofing Summary:
Hello, Sonja, and Welcome to NetTutor! This is Adriane R, and I am happy to review your paper.
Strengths:
The introduction does offer some background information to the readers on what exactly your research essay will deal with.
Well done!
Suggestions:
You want to include a good and clear thesis after your introduction that clearly states the main point of your paper as a whole. A thesis
serves as the guiding premise behind any research assignment. The thesis should define what the research will focus on, reflect on
the specific position/ argument made within the frame of this research, and formulate it clearly and precisely. Let your readers know
what your position regarding the subject is, what you think is true, and what you are going to prove, especially if your topic and ideas
are very debatable. You may also refer to the in-line comments regarding the same.
You want to make sure that each main point mentioned in your thesis is discussed in a separate body paragraph in a sequential
order. Also, you want to make sure that all the ideas covered in the body of the paper should essentially be mentioned/included in the
thesis statement. Each body paragraph should begin with a good topic sentence that lets the readers know which point/idea from the
thesis that paragraph addresses. You also want to provide suitable examples wherever required in order to support each point in your thesis.
You want your conclusion to summarize the paper as well as revisit the main focus of your research. At the same time, you don’t have
to just re-write main points. Provide a basic synthesis of everything stated before. While rephrasing your topic and thesis statement,
you want to make sure to try and connect them logically so that your conclusion will sound like a coherent single thought rather than a
bunch of random ideas.
You want to refer to the MLA guide and the in-line comments for including in-text citations as well as the Works Cited page entries in
the correct formatting style.
You may also refer to all the in-line comments regarding certain suggestions. All these hints will help you in maintaining a clear focus
and also help in the transition, fluency, the overall development of the topic, and organization of your essay.
You also want to work some more on your grammar, mechanics, word choice, and sentence structure so that readers can concentrate
on what you are trying to convey.
I have marked the first instances of major grammar, sentence, and word level issues in the paper. These comments will help you
locate and fix other similar errors. You may also submit a second draft of the paper, but please be sure to mark it as the second draft.
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The MLA format does not require you to
include headings apart from the main title of
the essay. Headings and heading levels are
included in the APA formatting style.
Use a singular noun for a
singular verb. Ex.: The product is
made from an exotic herb found
only in the Amazon rain forest.
Though your introduction does
provide the readers with a
complete understanding and
background of your chosen
subject, you want to end the
introduction with a good and
clear thesis statement that
makes the readers aware of
the purpose and outcome of
your research process. Ex.:
There are numerous causes to
homelessness, and as a
society, it is our responsibility to
ensure that the homeless are
brought in the mainstream with
appropriate measures.
You want to specify what the
various methods are that would
help prevent child abuse.
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In the MLA format, when noting
three or more authors in a signal
phrase, use the words: and others.
If, however, you list the authors in
the in-text citation, use et al.:
(Ostrom et al. 60).
What are the various adverse
effects of child abuse on the
victims? You might want to
cite an example in brief that
supports this particular point.
Use a pair of commas in the
middle of a sentence to set
off clauses, phrases, and
words that are not essential
to the meaning of he
sentence. Use one comma
before to indicate the
beginning of the pause and
one comma at the end to
indicate the end of that
pause. Ex.: The food, on the
other hand, was rather bland.
Use a comma to set off
clauses, phrases, and words at
the end of the sentence.
Do different countries follow
different perceptions and
ideas regarding corporal
punishment? Which country
do you think has stricter rules
and punishments for child
abuse as an offense?
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You want to provide an
appropriate example here of
how a child might happen to
be negatively impacted due to
maltreatment. In what way
does this impact become
more evident in the child’s
adult age?
What have the various surveys
on child maltreatment
concluded? What sort of
negative effects have been
identified by researchers in
child maltreatment cases?
What are the different policies
introduced for addressing this
serious issue? Are these
policies sufficient to handle
this issue?
How should the system be
re-organized in order to carry out
prompt responses towards child
abuse victims? How should the
officials be trained perfectly to
address this issue and offer help
as well as security to those in
need? What sort of strategies
need to be put in place?
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This looks like a
complicated sentence.
You want to frame
shorter and simpler
sentences in order to
convey your exact
thoughts to the readers.
This is an incomplete/fragmented
sentence. A sentence
becomes a fragment
when it is missing either a
subject or a verb.
What does the treatment of
helping abused children
include? How are the victims as
well as their families made
aware of such treatments/programs
which help in minimizing the
negative effects of maltreatment
to children?
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The concluding paragraph should
necessarily reiterate the thesis,
though in different words, and
summarize all the main points
presented in the thesis to offer an
effective wrap-up to the research
essay. Restate your topic briefly and
explain why it’s important. You want
to provide a brief overview of the key
points without adding any new
details in the conclusion. You have
to address the future perspective of
your research and the considered
issue. It may be a suggestion or a
call to action.
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Entries that are more than one line should have a hanging indent.
(Every line except for the first line is indented by 0.5 inches.)
In the MLA formatting style,
when a source has three or
more authors, list only the
first author, names
reversed, and follow the first
name with a comma and et
al.
Ex.: Ostrom, Hans, et al.
Metro: Journeys in Writing
Creatively. Longman, 2001.
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